She will object, but she did invite me in. No one ever looks out for me, yet I am there for her, always.
She doesn’t want me now, though, I’m the lone witness of her suffering, her companion when the world turns its back on her. Nevertheless, she tries to get rid of me.
I wonder if it is her suffocated sniffles or my own strangled whimpers that will finally be heard!
I am starting off with a weekly series of Five Sentence Fiction every Tuesday here. The above story is written for the prompt WITNESS. Feel free to join me with your Five Sentence Fiction using Witness as prompt in the comments. I would love to read yours
Void Thoughts 
Wow! You are so good at this. Love the creativity and the choice of words. Beautiful.
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Thanks Parul.
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Loved the take, Vinitha! A few things fleeted through my mind while I read this. Your writing is evocative to say the least.
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Thanks a lot, Maliny.
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This one was really intriguing, Vinitha! And makes so much sense!
Cheers
Geets
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I’m glad that it made sense to you, Geetika. Thank you.
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A very interesting take on the prompt, Vinitha! They are sometimes the sole witness to our suffering. How true! I love these five sentence fictions. Been so long that I attempted fiction.
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FSF gave me the courage to attempt to try to write fictions. I miss Lillie mcferrin’s fsf linky. Isn’t that where I met you? 😀
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Vinitha your flash fictions are truly one of a kind. Loaded with emotions they stirke a chord almost always
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So happy to know that you like my micro fictions. Thanks a lot, Ramya. ☺
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Vinitha,
You are getting quite good at this flash/micro fiction thing.
Tears – they’re always there for us, aren;t they?
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You made my day, Sid. I’m gonna frame this comment. 😄
Yes, tears are the silent companions, invisible hand holder when we are upset. Yet we always wipe them away.
Thanks, Sid!
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Incredible; I envy the bloggers who can write so much in so little – Brilliant!
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Thank you for the lovely comment, Shalini. 😊
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Lovely take on the prompt Vinitha! The last line did it for me.
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Here’s the link to my post on this prompt. Let me know what you think of it. 🙂
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Thanks, Esha. ☺
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Ah, a tear narrating. Very interesting.
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Thanks, Rachna. 🙂
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Seems very unfair that one friend is so loyal and the other is not. Thought provoking. Reminds me of relationships I’ve been in that were one sided with me doing all the giving and the other person taking advantage. I like the descriptive last sentence with the suffocated sniffles and strangled whimpers.
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I’m glad to know that you liked the story, Cat. Waiting to read your take on the prompt. 😀
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Very intriguing – trying to figure out who is narrating!
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Apologies if it wasn’t clear, Laurel. The tear is the narrator here. 🙂
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Oh, I like it! And I like that it made me think – no apology necessary! 🙂
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😀
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