“Dear god, here is the 100th coin, as I promised. You do know how hard it was for me to get 100 coins! Of course, you know, that’s what my mom told, that God knows everything.”
“Now can you please give me my mom back? I need her more than I need you, pretty please,” tears rolled out of those little hopeful eyes.
Written based on the prompt – Offering for Five Sentence Fiction.
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the most touching 5 lines I’ve ever read…beautiful 🙂
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Ah,This is so poignant. The child’s emotions have been so beautifully carved by you! Tears came to my eyes.
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Well written – really touched me.
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You’ve captured the pain perfectly
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Thank you, Sunita.
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I don’t know what to say, if only it were possible to bring her back! This post of few words, definitely tugged at my heart 🙂 Great work here.
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I know it is very painful. I am really glad that you liked it, Vidya. Thanks for stopping by. 🙂
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Ohh! That’s heart wrenching!! 😦
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Yes it is. No misery is greater than that of a child missing his parent. Thank you for stopping by, Shilpa.
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Heart-breaking!!! 😦 But beautifully written, Vinitha!! 🙂
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Thank you, Shalini. 🙂
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Oh, poor little one. Well done.
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Thanks, Laurel.
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The simplicity of youth. Never questioning their need, just getting to the heart of the problem. Well done in five sentences.
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If only! Very poignant, Vinitha!
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Yes, if only!! Thank you for stopping by, Corinne.
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Its beautiful story.
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Thank you, Lata. 🙂
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Ohh! Poor little soul! Wonderfully narrated, Vinitha! My heart went out to that little baby!
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Thanks, Shilpa. 🙂
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I am so moved reading this and this (perhaps) shows you succeeded in your writing…brilliant !!!
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Thank you, Manish. Welcome to my blog.
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